analysis of first draft

In the beginning of my draft we hear an introduction from the main character, Jaqueline, who is explaining what type of person she is and emphasizing that she is till at school. This is important as it establishes to the audience who the main character is and where the scenario is going to be based of her introduction. This will prevent any further confusion on when the story begins and allow the listeners to understand the main character better.

Throughout the radio drama we have dialogue between the main character as well as other characters such as her friends from school who are apart of the main storyline as well as someone called anonymous. By having these dialogue throughout the radio drama listeners are able to build up the storyline and understand what its about and put together the pieces. It also emphasizes the relationship the character has with these are characters allowing the audience to be more intrigued. Furthermore throughout the radio drama I utilized sound effects such as intense music as well as camera shots to build up the tension of the story. By utilizing these sound effects it keeps the listeners on their feet trying to find out what will happen next.